Examples Of When A Freshman Beat Reporter Tries Too Hard ...
by Nestor on Oct 29, 2009 5:50 AM PDT
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... and ends up writing a really lame article.
The first few grafs of Jon Gold's profile on Rahim Moore will make you cringe:
Pac-10 quarterbacks, watch out.
If Rahim Moore gives you that look - that deep, longing, alluring, penetrating, soul-piercing, heart-tugging look - be afraid. Be very afraid.
It means he's looking you directly in the eyes, almost through them. It means Moore knows something you don't. Or, rather, it means he knows everything you do know.
It's the same look he would give Jessica Alba.
"I love her so much and I love quarterbacks," Moore said. "I keep my eye on her and I keep my eye on the quarterback. Anything he does, I'm on it. The way he walks, the way he uses his arms, his windup, I know all that. I tell myself, `That's Jessica Alba, I'm not gonna take my eyes off her.' I like her so much, I'm gonna do all I can to get her.
"And I'm gonna do all I can to get him to throw it to me."
Uh what? You can read rest of the piece here.
"Deep, longing, alluring, penetrating, soul-piercing, heart-tugging?" That kind of writing will make Diane Pucin and Marcia Smith proud. Just needling you a little Gold.
Also, he did a little analysis on UCLA's freshmen in the football team on his blog which was somewhat misplaced. Apparently he had a discussion with Adam Maya (The OC Register UCLA beat reporter who happens to be a Trojan alum) and came up with an idea comparing the depth chart position of Brehaut, Hasiak and Thigpen to that of XSF to make the point that just because XSF has been starting every week, it has resulted in mroe confident production. Of course as his commenters pointed out his analysis was off based because it's not just a matter of freshmen receivers and running backs getting adequate playing time, but it is also about execution when they get in and also making sure they are put in right position to succeed.
Hey I have enjoyed Gold's enthusiasm for his work ever since he took over for Brian Dohn. It's clear he is working his rear end off and doing what he can to bring information. However, I think he needs to throttle back a little at times in terms of his excitement.
Looks like he is going through "growing pains" just like our frosh. Perhaps he can note that on his blog.
GO BRUINS.
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It seems sort of Plaschke-esque to me
I think it serves as a dual reminder of what Gold should try not to be as well as how bad the SUC Times’ entire sportswriting lineup is.
by Tydides on Oct 29, 2009 8:40 AM PDT reply actions 0 recs
Writing styles
I have found that it’s generally a mistake to make a list of adjectives before you start writing, with the objective of somehow working every one of them into whatever you’re writing.
And i agree that this writing style smells — I mean, seems a lot like Plashke’s. I give one piece of advise to this yound man: Mr. Gold, if you are going to copy someone else’s writing style, then make sure that it’s a good writing style. Plashke’s isn’t. As an example, just read this with every clause set out in
its
own
paragraph.
by Fox 71 on Oct 29, 2009 9:56 AM PDT up reply actions 0 recs
Rahim Moore article was a bit odd, but...
the post he had about the freshmen being misplaced was an interesting take. Who cares if he was talking with Adam Maya from the OC Register who used to be a Trojan. Nothing is wrong with getting other people’s opinions who are in your same industry.
by EJBruin on Oct 29, 2009 11:42 AM PDT reply actions 0 recs
Agreed...
… I didn’t quite understand why he made such a big deal out of that whole “Jessica Alba” thing, but I have generally been impressed with his enthusiasm and willingness to take the beat job seriously. I actually think he “gets” the blog thing better than Dohn, who was a great beat reporter but generally kept most things close to the vest.
I actually didn’t mind that depth chart analysis he did, but I do agree that Maya seems to take whatever negative spin he can on anything coming out of our coaches or players.
by uclaike on Oct 29, 2009 12:30 PM PDT reply actions 0 recs
Adam Maya
You just have to read this to get a sense of general contempt for UCLA. He does OK time to time but on number of occasions he shows his true colors.
by Nestor on Oct 29, 2009 12:43 PM PDT up reply actions 0 recs
I disagree
he is a weasel dick.
But hey, what do I know. I’m just the 800 lbs bruin in the room.
by tasser10 on Oct 31, 2009 8:50 PM PDT up reply actions 0 recs
What Maya Meant
What Maya means to say in all his articles is that he wishes he was covering USC for a bigger outlet. He’s bitter and that stupid “What they meant to say” feature is always negative. No wonder newspapers are dying.
by yobless on Nov 3, 2009 4:14 PM PST up reply actions 0 recs
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